Dark Beast

It is good for the story overall, but lacks much action or advancement in the story. Very good and there aren't many mistakes besides you should edit it so it ...

Thanks for that, i fixed it up a bit. Chikako sounds like (Shee-ka-coo) just to straighten that out. This was a informative chapter, it is explaining some of the things ...

They stepped inside the old home, unsure of what was happening. The house had already had a creepy aura, but Chikako just made it worse. She seemed eager to tell ...

That was good. The explanation was much better and is clear to people who don't know about war hammer.

Thats awesome, good descriptions, has a bit of confusion if they don't know that your talking about WH.

Kazuki woke with a start. His jacket was torn and his arm was bleeding, the grey color was washed over with sand and blood. The ground was soaked in the ...